Your thoughts?

A cruel, shamanic trader—secretly plagued by seizures—fails to save a child from drowning. Guided now by celestial visions he must restore hope to her miserable village before his ultimate decline.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for a young girl’s accidental drowning. Now he must restore hope to her despairing village before his decline is absolute.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work saving future generations from despair.

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Blamed for a young girl’s drowning, a declining shaman must inspire ancient rivals to restore hope in her survivors before dementia seals his cruel legacy and dooms them to despair.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work saving future generations from despair.

vs.

Blamed for a young girl’s drowning, a shaman with a reputation for cruelty must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work before he succumbs to dementia.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work saving future generations from despair.

#logline #screenwriting

Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work and save future generations from despair.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work and save future generations from perpetual despair.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work or future generations will be cursed to live in perpetual despair.

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Your thoughts?

A once-feared shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work, or future generations will live in perpetual despair.

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Your thoughts?

A feared but reformed shaman is blamed for the accidental drowning of a village child. Now plagued by dementia, he must inspire those who loved her to carry on his work or future generations will suffer.

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New #logline for my #pilot Fill Count. What do you think?

In a desperate bid for one last shot at baseball glory, an aging slugger teams up with a vampire whose allegiance to his own kind is threatened, as they both risk everything to boost the slugger's performance on the field

#screenwriting feedback--your thoughts on this #logline for DEPRAVED INDIFFERENCE?

Evangeline Slote, an unholy amalgam of Elizabeth Taylor and Sarah Palin, is the matriarch of a family of con artists who specialize in identity theft. When her alcoholic husband Warren is felled by a massive heart attack, she and her unhealthily devoted son Devin concoct a desperate scheme to end all schemes—which may take the murder of an elderly and very rich socialite to complete.

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#CatInTheRain by #Hemingway #Logline A man gives a woman a cat

Any #screenwriters available to help me choose a #logline for my scifi/action feature? From the 3 versions below, which sounds best to you (or do you have a better version?) Any feedback is welcomed.

Getting some revision work done today. My #WIP:

GENRE: #CosmicHorror

#Logline: On their small rural farm, a fundamentalist Christian family spirals in the midst of a terrifying world-wide cosmic event.

Getting some revision work done today. My #WIP:

GENRE: #CosmicHorror

#Logline: On their small rural farm, a fundamentalist Christian family unravels in the midst of a terrifying world-wide cosmic event.

Last year I won WME Story Editor Christopher Lockhart's #logline and #pitch competition in The Inside Pitch. Here are nine tips on what to do (and what not to) when pitching! https://www.scriptfella.com/articles/how-to-win-a-screenwriting-pitch-competition
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